Have a look at the settings above and imagine you are there. Write the introduction to a mystery story, using between 50 and 100 words. Think about describing the SENSES in your opening. What could you see, hear, smell? What did you touch and how did you feel?
In the middle of the night I herd some strange noises. When I opened my eyes I saw a pyramid and lots of sand. I was in Egypt. I was all alone. It was very dark. I found a pharaoh he was bright gold and dusty. I was very scared because I herd something. There was another room on the left I thought there was something or someone coming my way. It was...
ReplyDeleteby Natalia
What an exciting place to pause your story. It adds lots more drama and suspense to your story. Well done!
DeleteHow did you get to Egypt?
great work
DeleteYou made a good effert pauseing it
DeleteIt was a dark pitch black room I was in.There was a hieroglyphs on the wall and there was pictures of little figures of humans.There were thease four small lights that were scaring me because one went off then another.The bricks was falling one then another.
ReplyDeleteI heard echoing sounds whilst I was walking around the room.I smelt a disgusting smell of revolting mud.
When I was walking I saw a tumbe I wanted to open the golden tumbe after I felt like I was in a horror movie. There were thease six pictures that I felt like it was moving. Every second I was shaking and tilting.
It was a very windy day in Egypt when the moon was rising up.Just when I looked up there was a massive statue that scared me. There was a pyramid and on top of it there was a sharp pointy edge.
From shaeer
I like that you used paragraphs.
DeleteThink about when to use was or were.
In the morning I woke up while I felt I wasn't in my usual house any more so I then quietly sneeked through the house because I thought there was someone in the house.I went to the next room when suddenly I saw no one in my house but through the window I saw pyramids rising high into the sky.They where so scary that I quickly ran into my bed and went to sleep.
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I was in a pitch black room.There was hieroglyphs on the wall and there was a picture of little human figers. There was four small lights that terrified me because one went of then another.The bricks fell one after the another. I heard echoing sounds while I was walking.I smelt disgusting and revolting mud.
ReplyDeleteAs was walking I saw a golden and dusty tumbe. I was very scared every thing made me feel like I was in a horror movie. There were six pictures that I felt was moving and every second I was shaking and tilting.
It was a very windy day in Egypt when the moon was rising up. When I looked up I saw a massive statue that scared me. On the top of the prymid there was a large sharp point at the top.
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nice comment shaeer
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I was Climbing through the pyramids. I was feeling very anxious because i heard someone come my way .The wind was blowing and i suddenly felt that i was getting all dusty. A little while later I saw a coffin with a mummy in but it disappeared in less then a second and...
ReplyDeleteOne day i was sleeping in my bed ,so suddenly i heard some strange voices coming from down stairs
ReplyDeleteSo i woke up and went down stairs i was really scared and shocked because i saw some mummies coffins in that room and lots of strange paintings on the wall
I run away from that room then saw a big pyramid through the window.i didn't know what was happening with me
My whole home looks like a strange place and everywhere sand pyramids and coffins.i had an feeling of some one chasing me when i turned back suddenly my eyes open and i was in my room
Thank god it was a dream.
One night when my dad was sleeping I went to his time machine and flew high until I crashed and felt something bang on the machines door. I opened the door with fright and it was an mummy that was waken from death . I was so scared that I screamed and everything I saw was real.
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one day I was eating my wonderfull breakfast.But i was suddenly in egept!so i sreemed through the house. So i went to the room but i sore a riddicoules painting there were lights evrywere in my backyard i was terrefed,worried and i was cring because i did not find my mum.It was dark,creepy and craciling sounds there were dark statuse in my frontyard i sore some mummies in a coffin and red rivers around my house but...to be contiued.
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I awoke with a peculiar feeling inside me. My head was aching and my back was hurting. I was lying down, on my back on a marble floor and I didn't have the slightest clue where I was. I saw a few dusty patches on the smooth marble floor. I was getting a bit spooked from the mummy designs and sculptures made on the crumbling walls. Soon I realized that I was in Egypt, with strange paintings. I explored for a bit but then as the sun set over the horizon of the lone, Egyptian desert, I awoke once again to my own friendly bedroom.
ReplyDeleteOnce I was sleeping deeply in my bed ,suddenly I hared a voice coming from downstairs so I got out of bed and went down stairs when I reached the end of the stairs I was so frightened then I saw something but it was to fast and it ran away...from Mahirah
ReplyDeleteI was of with time machine again. Suddenly it teleported me to an ancient Egypt. I heard a strange sound. After a while I realized that only the wind blowing his sad song. In the Sphinx eyes I saw reflects of the moon. I was scared. I decided to look for a shelter. After a long run I found an entrance to a giant pyramid. Dungeons were full of shiny scarabs which light my way up. Few minutes after I started to smell candles. They were in the very big and bright room. In the middle I saw a golden mummy. I heard many treasures could be found near.
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I made a wish in my dream about going to Egypt.It came true, when I opened my eyes and found myself in Egypt.I could hear the wind blowing the sand into my eyes.The whole place was covered with statues. I could hear footsteps, someone was coming...
ReplyDeleteone strange day I was sleeping in my new bed in my own room at Halloween. When I was in deep sleep I sore some funny picture of Egypt. When I turn around I sore an tall pyramids so I ran to the tallest one and sore a mummy
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It was a pitch-black night and I was surrounded by the sand and I heard a strange noise. So, I decided to turn around and I thought it was a mummy running around. So, I turned my flash light on, look what I found. I found a pharaoh. It was looking for something to eat and I was his dinner! I felt scared, I ran and ran and…
ReplyDeleteOne day,i was just walking through the town when suddenly........... i thought i saw something but i assumed it was nothing.when suddenly It happened again,so i turned round and i saw a huge pyramid.So i went inside and i saw a big coffin, mummy and a piece of gold.It was so amazing telling you all about my day but my mum just told me i have to go home.Bye!
ReplyDeleteOne day , i was just walking down town when suddenly i thought i felt something behind me ! but i assumed it was nothing , so i carried on walking . This time i heard it , so i turned round but nothing was there , only a huge pyramid .It looked so beautiful but creepy at the same time . So i went in and i saw a big coffin , mummies and a pile of shimmering gold . Then suddenly , all the light went out and i was left standing all alone in the dark .....................................................................................
ReplyDeleteAs I was standing I saw an Egyptian,creepy mummy, I felt scared and worried. I saw old paintings on the wall, they had unusual writing next to them. The smell that was in the room was revolting, and the air felt damp. I walked to towards the Mummy and touched the gold metal feet of the mummy. It felt cold and looked shiny. In fear of my life I ran out the room. Suddenly in front of me and towering over me was a humungous pyramid. When I touched the bottom of the pyramid, the ground began to shake and the pyramid began to shift, what was happening I wondered....
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I was on my way to holiday but suddenly we stopped. I decided to go outside then I saw a massive pyramid and I realised I was in Eygpt. I decided to go exploring. When I got to the pyramid I went inside, it smelt like toilet waste so I pinched my nose and carried on walking. It was very dark and made me feel scared. When I started to walk out of the pyramid it was night time so I made my own bed in the sand. In the morning I set off again and I went even further into the pyramid and saw a lot of mummies. Then I remembered what happened in the movie The Mummy Returns so I ran straight out and all the way home.
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I am in Egypt at the middle of the night in front of Giza pyramid complex.It is a huge pyramid and there is a huge statue which has only head and up to shoulders.It is a full moon night and the full moon behind the pyramid hiding part of the moon.As it was night and a opened place i am hearing some sounds,which scared me in the silent night.I am hearing eco sound of every movement of mine thought the place is amazing i felt scary as it is night.I went inside of the pyramid.I saw a mummy box the smell is good.And they were pictures and paintings of god and goddess.suddenly i woke up.it was a scary dream.....!!!
ReplyDeleteIt was a frosty night whilst I was climbing the biggest pyramid of Giza. I felt very excited because it was the first time I went to visit Egypt. I was told that there were piles of platinum in the pyramid. It was all dark and gloomy when suddenly, it went even darker that I couldn’t see a thing. Luckily, I reached the top of the pyramid and made it to the entrance. The smell was very acrid because there was lots of dust. It made me sneeze a lot. Then, I saw a saw a man. I could hear his voice saying something to me. I walked closer to him and within a second a hand grabbed me from my shoulder…
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While I was about to get out of bed I felt that I was standing on a smooth surface.I looked around when I saw a pyramid and a load of sand.I was in Egypt!There was also a mummy right next to me.I was anxious and frightened about what might happen to me.I touched the closest pyramid to me.When I touched the pyramid it started to wobble a bit on my side and I could not do anything about it at that time...
ReplyDeleteWhile I was about to get out of bed I felt that I was standing on a smooth surface.I looked around when I saw a pyramid and a bunch of sand on the ground below.I was in Egypt!There was a mummy right next to me.I was anxious and frightened about what might happen to me.I touched the nearest pyramid to me.When I touched the pyramid it started to wobble and I felt that it will tumble on my side and I could not do anything about it at that time but it didn't happen.The place smelt yucky and disgusting that I had to hold my breath for a long time.I felt like I heard an owl hooting on a tree near me.I took a bit of clothing from the mummy to wrap some around my bed and got some in my hand pulled it everywhere.Soon some roaring sound was coming from the place close to me...
ReplyDeleteWhile I was about to get out of bed I felt that I was standing on a smooth surface.I looked around when I saw a pyramid and a load of sand.I was in Egypt!There was also a mummy right next to me.I was anxious and frightened about what might happen to me.I touched the closest pyramid to me.It smelt disgusting and stinky that I had to hold my breath for a long time.I took some string from the mummy and tied some to my bed and I held some in my hand.I pulled it to the pyramid and opened it.I saw a coffin and some mummy's in.At that time I immediately ran to the mummy and took it into the pyramid.Then a loud and roaring noise came from the other side of me...
ReplyDeleteIt was in pitch black room that i was in . On the wall there was a pictures of the little figures of humans. In the room there was five sparks outside my window. I was scared and creeped out because it was creepy and spooky .. i didnt know where i was?
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Suddly I was inside a GIANT cothin I looked around. My favorite teddy was lying next to me. THEN her eyes turned bright red and slowly she turned her head and said you are a mummy stay here your dead. Finally I really needed air the cothin started to rattle it was collapsing. How would I get out?.............................
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ReplyDeleteWhen i was visiting my grandfather he gave me a book. I started to reading and suddently i was in Egypt. I was scary and shaking. It was very strange place. I goes through long dark tunel to the very big light room. There was colorfull pictures on the walls. On the middle was tomb and smells was really discusting. I decited to open the tomb and mummy jump from there. I started run and i fell down. Then i woke up next to my grandfather. It was amazing and mystery trip.
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I woke up to the sound of dripping water. I found myself in a dark, scary place. I rubbed my eyes to look around and saw a strange shadow. It was … A MUMMY! I tried to run and escape, soon the pyramids started to rise and blocked my exit. I felt terrified and it was tricky to get out.
ReplyDeleteIn Eygipt i heard a creaky noise it sound from the basement but suddenly i found a mummy! i treid to run but she was running after me i was terrified i was so close to my house soon the pharaoh came. Soon he... By Arselan
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